Thick, pellucid, amber sweetness drips from your honeyed tongue in sticky streams of golden viscous lies suspending me in butterscotch memories of cruel, hazel eyes.
Thanks. My mentor tells me to read my poetry out loud all the time. It helps to hear the flow. That has helped a lot cause sometimes I'll read it and hear how awkward or stilted a piece is. Thank you for your comment!
You might recognize his name from Poetic Bloomings - Sal Buttaci. He has been giving me basic poetry lessons. He is a retired teacher and a terrific poet. I never had the chance to go to college so his tutoring is a real blessing.
Oh, wow...so neat what our minds can do...working under the surface to create even more of the idea that we wish to express....the esses...lying snakes! :)
Thanks for popping in my WP site - I have this one too as some have issues leaving comments. Margo is a gem - I guess I can't be surprised that many of us have had the same teacher! One teacher to about 25 to 30 students over how many years.
I am so glad you are writing...your talent is no longer hidden in honey combs, but flowing quite nicely. Lucky to have a mentor. :)
Have you read this aloud? The use of all the esses suits the piece terrifically.
ReplyDeleteI went back and read it again aloud... sort of makes me think of a snake, just like the lying fellow, ha.
DeleteThanks. My mentor tells me to read my poetry out loud all the time. It helps to hear the flow. That has helped a lot cause sometimes I'll read it and hear how awkward or stilted a piece is. Thank you for your comment!
ReplyDeleteI love that you have a (poetic) mentor...♥
DeleteYou might recognize his name from Poetic Bloomings - Sal Buttaci. He has been giving me basic poetry lessons. He is a retired teacher and a terrific poet. I never had the chance to go to college so his tutoring is a real blessing.
DeleteOh, wow...so neat what our minds can do...working under the surface to create even more of the idea that we wish to express....the esses...lying snakes! :)
ReplyDeleteIsn't it. I didn't realize until Margo pointed it out.
DeleteThanks for popping in my WP site - I have this one too as some have issues leaving comments.
ReplyDeleteMargo is a gem - I guess I can't be surprised that many of us have had the same teacher! One teacher to about 25 to 30 students over how many years.
I am so glad you are writing...your talent is no longer hidden in honey combs, but flowing quite nicely. Lucky to have a mentor. :)